Expert: Susan Rand - 3/22/2006

Question
Hallo Susan, i explain:
<What is history,when isn' t the past re-vision, just a children' stories mythical vision?>

Meaning: what is history, when isn't  a mental image of the past brought up to date by our present knowledge of the facts, ( opposite to one made up to measure & so...) just a children' stories mythical vision?

A pun between revision & vision. Thanks

Answer
Hello Ken:

That makes it clearer, but if "Meaning:" is what you meant to say, why didn't you say it? If it's not on the page, it isn't anywhere. The reader has no way to reach into your head and pull out your "meaning," it must be plain in the writing.

I would suggest you write the sentence so: "What is history; when isn't a mental image of the past brought up to date by our present knowledge of the facts?" I believe this states clearly what your meaning is; what the part about children's stories adds is not clear to me, so I would leave it off. Of course you are the author and will make up your own mind. I applaud you for being so determined to state things clearly.

I hope this helps. If it does, a nice rating would be greatly appreciated. I am proud of my high score over 600 questions.

And good luck with your writing!