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Expert: Jerry Leone Date: 6/22/2008 Subject: Proposal for creating a club at my high school
Question Hello,
I am creating a club at my high school that aids animals, particularly
homeless ones. I wrote up a proposal and would like to know if it is sufficient.
Animal Allies
Purpose:
Although ____ High School has created many successful clubs that appeal to
students, there lacks a club that involves aiding animals. Animals face
devastating overpopulation and the student body should be informed of how
to help bring it to an end. With animals being such a big part of people’s
lives, it is time to give back to animals and help find caring homes for them.
This club can also fundraise and then provide money and supplies to local
animals shelters. Animal Allies would be a club that teaches students how to
care for animals and educate them on issues dealing with animals such as
animal cruelty and fighting fur.
Goals:
-Assist homeless animals find loving homes.
-Support a local animal organization that helps homeless pets such as
directly volunteering at the shelter or adoption shows, organizing a supply
collection, or holding a fund-raiser.
-Create awareness to stop overpopulation of cats and dogs, animal cruelty,
and fur production
Location:
In Mrs. Smiths' room every other Friday during lunch conducted by founder,
Jane Doe.
Thank you for your time.
Answer Jane:
Try this:
Purpose:
Although ____ High School has created many successful clubs that appeal to students, there lacks a club that involves aiding animals. Animals face devastating overpopulation. Our student body should be informed as to how to help alleviate this problem. With animals being such a big part of people’s lives, it is time to give back to animals and help find caring homes for them. This club can also raise funds to provide money and supplies for local animal shelters. Animal Allies would be a club that teaches students how to
care for animals and educate them on issues dealing with animals.
Goals:
We would assist by finding loving homes for homeless animals. We would support a local animal organization that helps homeless pets by volunteering at the shelter or adoption shows, organizing a supply collection, or holding fund-raisers. We would create awareness to stop overpopulation of cats and dogs, animal cruelty,
and fur production (?).
Location:
Mrs. Smith's room every other Friday during lunch conducted by
Jane Doe, founder.
