AboutAnne Benington Expertise I can answer questions about English grammar, style, usage. I can also help a writer assess the development of an essay, its unity, concrete support of topics, introductions and conclusions. In addition, I can discuss "writing the research paper" in all aspects of its development. Finally, I can assist in development of creative writing assignments. I will not totally proofread and correct a paper, but I will point out areas of concern and ways a writer can discover weaknesses and how to correct them.
Experience 20 years teaching high school English including 10 years teaching AP English literature; four years teaching college composition
Education/Credentials BS St. Mary of the Woods College, Indiana
MA University of Notre Dame, Indiana
Post graduate work: University of Michigan, University of Pittsburg
Awards and Honors Crystal Apple Outstanding Teacher of the Year award--1995--Awarded yearly to four teachers in all schools, public, private and parochial, in the Middletown, Edgewood, Madison school dictricts, Ohio. Archdiocese of Cincinnati Innovative Teaching Award 1996. Teacher of the Year Award, Fenwick High School, Middletown, OH, 2002,
Ex: If a person is very smart and talented, if others can’t count on him then it’s useless no matter how excellent the records are that he achieves.
I wonder if there’s a better way to revise the sentence above.
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Ex: Successful people have more energy to do anything they want to do no matter how difficult the situations in which they find themselves.
I have revised the above sentence as the following. Please give me some feedback.
I wonder if there’s a better way to revise the sentence above.
Successful people are energetic and interested in whatever they do no matter how difficult the situation may be.
3.
Ex: Successful people are always optimistic when facing any troublesome problems. They’re always insisting that success is possible up to the last moment.
Should I leave out “troublesome” in the sentence? What does “success is possible up to the last moment” mean? Or is there a better way to rephrase it?
Answer Hello Oppo,
Sentence #1 is a bit confusing. If a person concentrates, he or she can understand the meaning but you might say it this way for clarity:
"Even if a person is very smart and talented, his excellent records are of no value if others can’t count on him."
The revision of your second sentence is very good. I would not change it.
"Success is possible up to the last moment" means that until a project or problem is really over, one can still solve the problem or make the project a success. Many times people give up and say, "There is no answer to this problem," but creative, intelligent people will never take this answer. They will always strive to find a solution.
You might write the sentence this way: "Successful people are always optimistic when facing complicated problems, insisting that success is possible up to the last moment."
