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Dear ted,
Please help me with following statements again. If you have any idea to express these statements in another way or better, please let me know.

1- He is mid-height, and he has got pot belly.

2- Red roses stand for love and passion.

3- We always cracked jokes and mimicked our teachers’ voices and postures.

4- Almost all daytime the environment is really tranquil.

5- He was a man with rough exterior but soft inside.

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Dear Ali:

Dear ted,
Please help me with following statements again. If you have any idea to express
these statements in another way or better, please let me know.

1- He is mid-height, and he has got pot belly.

*** He is of medium height, and he has a pot belly.

2- Red roses stand for love and passion.

*** GOOD

3- We always cracked jokes and mimicked our teachers’ voices and postures.

*** GOOD

4- Almost all daytime the environment is really tranquil.

*** Ali, I don't understand what this sentence means.  Do you mean that everything is quiet during the day?  You might say this, "During the daytime, my world is usually quiet."

5- He was a man with rough exterior but soft inside.

*** This sentence is very good.  I would suggest this change:  He was a man with a rough exterior, but he was soft inside.

Ted

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