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Question Hi
I had written an essay regarding my career gal and objective. Can you please review it and give me your feed back
For the past 2 years I have been planning to earn an MBA. I am excited now to be on the cusp of making that dream in to a reality.
I completed my bachelor’s degree in Accounting for University of Houston, and started working for Halliburton / KBR in the Financial Controls Group. Working with Halliburton / KBR helped me in two ways. First it enhanced my Accounting Knowledge and secondly it provided me an excellent introduction to business world. During my first two years at Halliburton / KBR I worked on different challenging projects like the Implementation of Information Technology Financial Controls across the organization. This not only strengthened my analytical and problem solving skills but also taught me the importance of financial controls in an organization. Now I want more challenging opportunities than what the financial control department can offer.
Movement towards a global economy and unprecedented explosion of free trade and worldwide exchange has made me realize that I need to learn more and do my MBA. Thus my career goal is to join the ranks of top management at Halliburton / KBR, and make a positive difference in the organization.
To achieve my career goal I would need strong business fundamentals and would have to learn more about current global developments specially developments in financial markets and financial applications.
MBA from University of Houston will provide me with the theoretical understanding and will give me skills to understand the environmental impact of a business. MBA will also provide me in depth idea of practical approaches that will help me with the decision making process.
If admitted to the program at University of Houston. I will bring enthusasiam, dedication and good work ethic. I am proud of my accomplishments so far. I now like to take my self to a next, level and earning an MBA from University of Houston is the perfect way to do so.
Answer For the past 2 years I have been planning to earn an MBA. I am excited now to be on the cusp of making that dream in to a reality.
I completed my bachelor’s degree in Accounting for University of Houston, and started working for Halliburton / KBR in the Financial Controls Group. Working with Halliburton / KBR helped me in two ways. First it enhanced my Accounting Knowledge, and second, it gave me an excellent introduction to business world. During my first two years at Halliburton / KBR I worked on different challenging projects like the Implementation of Information Technology Financial Controls across the organization. This not only strengthened my analytical and problem solving skills but also taught me the importance of financial controls in an organization. Now I want more challenging opportunities than are available in the financial control department.
Movement toward a global economy and the unprecedented explosion of free trade and worldwide exchange has made me realize that I need to learn more and do my MBA. Ultimately, my career goal is to join the ranks of top management at Halliburton / KBR, and make a positive difference in the organization.
To achieve my career goal, I would need strong business fundamentals and would have to learn more about current global developments specially developments in financial markets and financial applications.
An MBA from University of Houston will provide me with the theoretical understanding and will give me skills to understand the environmental impact of a business. MBA will also provide me in depth idea of practical approaches that will help me with the decision making process.
If admitted to the program at University of Houston. I will bring enthusiasm, dedication, and a good work ethic. I am proud of my accomplishments so far. I now want to go to the next level, and earning an MBA from the University of Houston is the perfect way to do so.
