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About Dan Riordan
Expertise
I am an expert in the E-Rate, the Schools & Libraries portion of the Universal Service Fund. I can answer questions for school districts on all topics related to applying for the program and receiving funds.

Experience
When the E-Rate was first implemented, I was trained by the NJ Department of Education to assist schools in obtaining funding. Since then, I have worked inside school districts and as a consultant, getting funding for a wide range of schools and libraries.

Organizations
New Jersey Association of School Business Officers (NJASBO)
Pennsylvania Association of School Business Officers (PASBO)
New Jersey Association of School Administrators (NJASA)


Publications
Keypost, July 2003

 
   

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Secondary School Educators - Please proof read my speech


Expert: Dan Riordan - 9/18/2009

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My Name is Thato Ngwenya, I am here representing MTN Corporate Business Unit. I would like to express my heartfelt gratitude to the Department of Education NW, special thanks to the MEC Rev Tselapedi for allowing MTN to be part of this remarkable and significant event, which is acknowledging the great job that is done by teachers towards improving literacy in the Country. When i received the request to sponsor the Department with some prizes for the event, the first thing that came to mind was mobility, how do we mobilize those educators who will be the lucky winners, at MTN we preach corporate mobility and connectivity, and we managed to come with some fantastic prizes which i believe will be much appreciated by those lucky winners as they will be able to receive communication on the go. Ladies and Gentlemen, Thank you very much. God Bless

Answer
I think it's fine, but I would suggest two minor changes.

First, instead of "great job that is done by teachers," I would just say, "great job done by teachers."

Second, instead of "improving literacy in the Country," I would say, "improving literacy in this country."

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