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please let me know how i would write:

"she shook her head no."

is the word no, in quotations, and if someone has their mouth gaged and they make a mmmm sound. Is that in quatation as well? also, if people looks give a meaning, is that in quaotes.

"she gave a look that said, "help me."
thank you for your time.

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Hello, Sara!

When "no" is intended, you may simply write - She shook her head.

When "yes" is intended, you may simply write - She nodded her head.

To use 'shook or nodded' in the same sentence with 'yes or no' is technically considered redundant and shows poor writing style.

As to your second question, looks don't 'say' anything.  However, they often 'show' an implied meaning.  A better style to use when writing the 'help me look' is to 'show' the reader.  For example: She gazed up at me, eyes wet and her lower lip quivering.

Let's take it a step further and add a piece of dialogue:
She gazed up at me, eyes wet and her lower lip quivering.
"Help me, please," she spoke softly, pushing out the words
with her final breath.

I hope this answers your question, and best of luck to you!

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