AboutJohn M. Lovett Expertise I can answer questions about the military as it relates to film production and screenwriting. I can answer questions dealing with period weapons and tactics; re-enactment/re-enactor use and coordination; military equipment, vehicles, and uniforms. I do not answer questions dealing with screenplay format, agents, or story ideas.
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Past/Present clients Warriors, Inc.
Dreamworks Interactive
Legacy Interactive
Silvertouch Pictures
Synergy Group
Nichols Productions
I asked you before about recommending musical notes or entrance in my script , you told me that avail , but many experts told me that it is work of an amaetuer in the same time I found also I complete screen play for movie done contain musical notes not only that but also some camera recommendations for instance
the camera ll enter sequential to the james face
or
focus on james hand
or
alternative shots between James & his friends
or
camera ll accompanied the birds flying in the sky until settle on the tree
or
pan on the group faces one after another
is the previous may be able to write ?
is recommending some camera specifications indirectly is available ?
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I want to ask about some tips in scene description , for instance
1- bus running fast on the road , I want to express it as as the bus coming toward the screen
2- some one stand on the railway the train coming toward him , I want to express that the train coming & approach from person subjective view until the train coming to the screen as it penetrate the screen
3- some one looking opposite to camera on his back ground sun rise or sunset appear
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* can I describe the background accompanied to the person or that's ll not be useful ?
* I had read many books also screen play but I found the format is same but picture , sounds descriptions expression differentiate between script to another , whats your opinion about that ?
wish to hear from you soon with your comments
ANSWER: I do not know how to answer your question regarding musical notes and camera directions. If you found a script that had those things in them good on you. If you want to use them in a script, go right ahead.
Camera directions are normally written into the action of a script. Direct camera directions are a thing of the shooting script. Now, if you are producing your own movie do what you want.
As far as your questions regarding scene description, it appears that you have written them as clearly as they could be written in the action. Just write what is happening.
As to your last question regarding why script books differ on sound descriptions, the answer is it is always up to the writer. Do what works for your script.
Good luck
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QUESTION: thank you sir
when I had tried searching a scripts of movies had made before, I found a lot of scripts with alphabetical , but I found thing confuse me for instance ( when I selected jaws movie script I found 3 things as following :
unspeicified draft
fianl draft
revised draft
draft
shooting script ( I think that the executed one related to director)
but when I choose for screenplay learning I choose what ????????
which of them can add to me as screen player writer ?
which of them is written completely by screen player writer? to learn from it
Answer The short answer is all these drafts were written by screenwriters.
Final draft and revised draft are just that.
A draft is just a certain draft at a certain date.
All these scripts are important to learn from. Part of the magic of learning to write for the screen is learning what other screenwriters left in or took out.
The trick is wondering why and thinking about what you would have done.
