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Can't find the answer to this anywhere:

I have a 4/5 shot montage with VO dialogue under it.
In the script, do I put the VO before or after the shots?

Example: (spacing not right. copy/paste from Final Draft)

MONTAGE- JOHNNY LEAVES HOME AND JOINS THE ARMY
Title: 1958
a)   Johnny drives past a highway sign: HOUSTON
b)   Johnny with his girlfriend Nancy.
c)   Johnny works at a soda fountain.
d)   Johnny and a friend in front of an Army enlistment office. A poster in the windows promotes the "Buddy Plan". They enter.
e)   Johnny engaged in a serious conversation with Nancy. She looks shocked and confused. He embarrassed. She cries. They embrace.
f)   Johnny in his uniform in basic training.

JOHNNY(V.O.)
(over montage)
It was 1958. I graduated high school and left home for Houston and my girlfriend Nancy. Got a room and a job. After two months, I broke up with her. I loved her but men attracted me more than she did. I joined the Army with my buddy John Cokin.

Thanks for your time.

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Richard,

Normally, dialog follows visual.

I would have to ask why the montage?  This scene(s) are nothing but exposition.  Should you not establish the sexuality of the character through his engagement with other characters; dialog and action, rather than just laying it all out?

Something to consider.

Good luck.  Keep writing.  

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